My unnamed story...chapter 1

 this is somthing im writing for fun. Im not sure where im taking it but bear with me

It need critisizm,thats where you come in....nothing is permanent

any better ideas for names,description,etc

any feedback is appreiciated

is you think it sucks im glad you told me so

The Beginning-Riley

Justin held my hand as we raced through the thick underbrush of the woods. We clumsily tripped and laughed as we headed uphill. It was dark and all of the Bar Harbor residents were asleep. Graduation parties didn’t last all hours of the night like other towns would. Everyone was so old fashioned and boring. Excluding Justin and his “crowd”, of course.

He helped me escape my Aunt Sarah’s inn for the night as a “graduation present”. I had no idea why a cool, hot, amazing guy with thick brown hair and glossy green eyes would ever ask me out during sophomore year. He had a radiant smile with a perfect jaw line and soft perfect lips, not to mention he was quarterback for the champion varsity football team.

I was just average. I had short, poufy, frizzy, blonde hair. My jaw was rigid and my lips were chapped and pale. I was a nerd all my life, ignored by all things popular.

Then suddenly he asked me to homecoming. Soon we were in a real relationship. He kissed me all the time, bought me presents, and even remembered my cat’s birthday! We are now graduated seniors, a full three-year relationship. I had a real life and a wonderful boyfriend.

Justin led me up the hill slowly and cautiously in the dark. When we reached the top he brought me over to a small mini campsite. A bonfire crackled next to the blankets set on the ground. Justin took me over to the blankets and sat down. I copied. He pulled me inward and softly kissed me. I became dizzy, like I always do. We roasted mini hot dogs and talked about college for a long time.

Justin pulled off his top showing his amazing abs. ”It’s so hot out here” he complained.

“I think you’re crazy”, Justin turned to me and saw how I shivered in my wool sweater. He wrapped his muscular arm around me. He generated a lot of heat. ”Thanks”

“You’re welcome”. His lips were near mychin. His breath gave me goose bumps. His lips came closer and finally reached my neck. He kissed it and moved up to my cheek. I turned my head so he could kiss my lips too. They felt like velvet.

Justin continued kissing me. I was practically out of oxygen when a rustling came from behind us. I turned. ”Justin…what was that?” I hugged him tightly.

“What’s what Ri?”

“Never mind. It was probably my imagination”

I wish it had been my imagination. If it weren’t real then my life would be much different. As I turned back up to his lips I saw them. Silver eyes jumped from the trees and pulled Justin from my grasp. He screamed and then there was silence. Justin slumped over, blood rushing from his neck.

I screamed .He was dead. The only guy that showed any interest in me was gone. The eyes came towards me. The thing looked so human but his eyes were so shiny…and his skin was pale. He was so…inhuman.

I continued screaming. The thing bent forward. It looked at me with it’s glowing eyes. ”Shhhhh” it whispered. It leaned inward. I tried to escape but he held my wrists. My kicking had no effect whatsoever. It put its lips on my neck. They were cold and hard. Like the sea glass I collected when I was little.

More rustling came from the woods. A low growl sounded. Before I could figure out what else was around me a stabbing feeling came to my neck. Then I lost four of my senses I couldn’t hear, see, smell, or taste…all I felt was a cold knife stabbing my insides, spreading through my body. Then I felt nothing. I couldn’t even tell if I was still alive anymore.